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Okay, right, so I owe you. This time of year leaves rain gold and yellow down into the bowl below the road home from black gaunt tangled limbs of half-bared ...

1) Nice imagery. I love the tone - the words all fit a certain theme, a feeling. You produced this magnificently. 2) We are but sinners in the hands of ...

1) You have a severe restating problem that, if fixed, I believe it could improve your writing tenfold. For example: Love is powerful. It’s a happiness far beyond any other, ...

Be nice, Brad. Princess Pettie - sorry to back the sour side, but this is relatively often heard. I would favor some original imagery or some-such. For example, the description ...

Its Always and Forever All of the "it's" need apostrophes. Its a life time experience Its now or its never Its hard to convince. Its a one way road Its ...

I'll lose some things I do not need: that tag, these toys, this plaited lead. I'll ditch some things I cannot use: that dish, those cans, these rawhide chews. I'll ...

There are so many different ways that I could be like a thousand mirrors, fragments of faces laugh as I smile. Did I learn my life from you? I have ...

(Seventy thousand Billion Four Thousand Eighty Two Trillion Voices for Creation-- till the bullet when bang) If you could tell the exact meaning of those numbers and why you choose ...

to mourn for boys who slayed each other still live nearby. Too long. Divide it up. Sorry for caustic comments, it's getting far too late for me to talk anymore ...

how’d ya feel about that- how’d ya feel about that. I enjoy this tactic, and I believe it was applied well. But I think the syntax and word choice were ...

Should I feel violated? Rapist! Moving on - meh. I hate you. You make it hard to critique a poem when say...the reader is fourteen and dating a crap poety ...

Okay, I can't listen to the audio because my computer is evil... But I can slather a useless comment on you. This is the best thing you've written in a ...

I know it was something cheap like that. I don't like the last two lines of the first stanza. I want to hear the echoes of his hooves in my ...

hand in hand is prayer. This is passive. How about just "prayer is hand in hand" and I can’t see for your eyes. This is awkward. You mean "I can ...

He had to be strong, he had to do this Guilt clung to his sweating body, seeping through his clothing. He brushed it aside he did this, he did that. ...